A second attempt at capturing those beautiful features like so many others have. I wanted to be able to let her be herself instead of stilted as in the previous image. I think a slight improvement, but something is still misssing. Same setup as before. Bounced Vivitar 283 from umbrellas positioned out of frame to her side. Tell me what would make this really a better image.
There's nothing that cannot be improved, but this is quite nice just the way it is. Nice modeling on the face. Nice dreamy expression. The only thing I can think of is sharper catchlights in the eyes. Paint 'em in with opaque white if they're not there. And sharper reflections on the lips. But those are minor things. I think you're doing quite well.