I would have toned down or removed the second catchlight in her eyes. This is a lovely classic portrait of an attractive model. The pose is good, lighting is handled well. I would have toned down her her shoulder by scrimming the light so it is about 1/2 stop less than it now is, you may be able to carefully burn it down in Photoshop just so the face is the brightess area of the portrait. I don't think the hat really adds as again the brighter areas (feathers?) draws one's eyes away from her eyes. She has such captivating eyes, that one wants to stay transfixed on them. Overall a truly wonderful portrait, so thank you for sharing it with us.